Hello, I am Dallin Stevenson. I am
from Powell, and graduated from Liberty High School Class of 2012. I play
guitar in a band called Turtle Island. I love music and I love listening to it.
I am an avid collector of vinyl records, and have over 100 vinyl in my
collection. I have a relatively large family, with three sisters, all of who
are around the age of 30. They are each married and have two children. I also have a brother who is 25, we share the
love of nature and the love to camp, and I usually try to make it out to Utah
(where he lives) or Idaho, Nevada or Arizona every summer to spend time
backpacking or camping with him. To me, the mountains and scenery of the
western United States is the one of the most magnificent things you can
experience.
When I was writing my poem, which is
about a wonderful time I had with my friend while exploring a river, as well as
the tranquility and introspection that you can feel when you truly immerse
yourself in nature, I tried to remember specific events, so that I could have
good imagery, while still remaining ambiguous enough so that readers could
ponder what I really meant by certain topics. The vagueness of the poem helps
tie into the way I felt on that tired, abnormally warm November Saturday. I
noticed that the rhyming pattern goes from A-A B-B to A-B-A-B but I’ll just
pretend that was intentional.
Gazing eyes, full of nervous excitement
Subtle and cold, they peer towards my crossed legs
Sitting on the cold hollow cement,
I could sit here, feel the river flow on for days
We walked along banks, meandering through trees
Blood seeped out of cut on the bridge of my nose
In and Indian Summer you don’t have to dodge bees
Again, I see your eyes, now wide like black holes
“Why do we cut our hair?” you asked, all puzzled
Yet as I stared into the river, I found my mind and nuzzled
Wandered and thought until I found peace in a corner
You repeated your question, and my conscience came forward
We threw down a blanket, closing our eyes
We lie in a meadow, bothered by the expanse of skies.
Alter Ego, Lucidity, Expectations speak to me
The grass undulates to the beat of the breeze
We returned to the car and you sang Gimme Shelter
The sun set, our location polluted the star belt
No stars, just black and a sliver of moon
I slept soundly that night, and dreaming fondly of noon.
I thought your poem was awesome! I didn't want to read mine after hearing yours! It was obvious that you put a lot of time and effort into it! The imagery was very vivid. Your entire poem seemed to flow very nicely too!
ReplyDeleteYour poem is very good. Not only did it rhyme well, it was thought out well with the things you mentioned.
ReplyDeleteVery descriptive poem. well thought out.
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